danmichel Posted March 17, 2009 Share Posted March 17, 2009 "Friends"how did we find each other?what made us such good friends?why did we learn to lean on each other?shoulder to shoulder...again and againthose precious days behind ustime passes and we've grown apartstill i know i would have been much lesswithout your friendship in my heartwhen i think about you these daysi think about a time so sweetwhen the only thing we had to knowwe were friends because we needed to be(2009 db michel) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tony Cartmill Posted March 17, 2009 Share Posted March 17, 2009 Not bad, Sissy Boy. I'd rework the last 2 lines to bring it up to the usual danmichael standards.The last 2 lines seem to drift away to a "I guess our friendship wasn't that special after all..." tone. And "be" not close to rhyming with "sweet".I expect a revision on my desk by Thursday... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
danmichel Posted March 18, 2009 Author Share Posted March 18, 2009 No revision Timid Tony...If i had said "we were friends only because we needed to be...i could see your point...But as it stands it means what i want it to me (but is of course open for interpretation)...As for the rhyme...I am not one to go for strict rhyming schemes...I have songwriting friends who do...and they sometimes come up with some really bizarre lines just to keep the rhyming scheme perfect...In this case for continuities sake...I cheat! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darlene Posted March 19, 2009 Share Posted March 19, 2009 Great writing, Danmichel! Your lyrics are always so sensitive and beautiful! --Darlene Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
danmichel Posted March 19, 2009 Author Share Posted March 19, 2009 Thanks Darlene!...That one was really meant as a short poem...rather than a lyric...because i compressed it so much...Going so fast from premise to payoff...If i decide to make a song out of it i'll have to expand it to explain more of the why things turned out that way part of it...Of course that would require me to spend more than 10 minutes writing time that i did in doing the first part! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted March 19, 2009 Share Posted March 19, 2009 Great work, danmichael! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
danmichel Posted March 19, 2009 Author Share Posted March 19, 2009 Thanks peanut8! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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